On a bright sunny day me and the family went to the batch on the beach to have a day out. So we packed a bag with food towels and beverages, we also decided to take our dog Jarod we brought Jarod from China a few months back. So a few hours later we arrived at the batch, so we unloaded the car and took a look at the magnificent view overlooking the ocean we put our bags at the door and went to have a picnic on the beach i grabbed out a loaf of bread and munched that down, after that we went inside to relax and get changed but out of no where Dad yells “Kids come here!” so we all rush to him to see that there was a broken window none of us know how it happened so we just taped it up and got on with our day
Hi there Kodie, I like how you used the words to make a story. I like how you used descriptive writing to make your story more interesting. I would love to see more writing in your story. But overall it is a pretty good story.
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